and thus continues a cranky week where you get naught but half-assed, first draft word doodles

10Feb10

if this doodle
was a song
the first quarter
or so
would just
be
music
or so
building
you know
almost like
the words
they
were organizing
themselves
steadying
themselves
for you
against you
because of
you
i choose
them
so very
carefully
and wonder
do messages change
based on
the receiver
do lies
work better
based on
the deceiver
they are
true
today
for you
this way
i want you
it’s fact
you know
it
you see
it
will be
everything
completely
fucking
each
other
even before
the clothing
drops
so
under
my
skin
on your skin
your mask
of in charge
doesn’t hide
your eyes
showing the battle
control
vs
giving
the
fuck
in
right
fucking
now
now
now
your tongue
enjoying
the taste
too much
to speak
i don’t need you
to
say it
i just need you
to know
if this doodle
was a song
we’d be close
to a
crescendo

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5 Responses to “and thus continues a cranky week where you get naught but half-assed, first draft word doodles”

  1. I don’t know why you keep hating on these “first drafts” – they’re some of my favorites.

  2. 2 M

    Mmmmmmmm. Yes.

  3. This is kind of raw. I like it.

  4. 4 M

    I love it. You can feel the crescendo.

  5. these doodles
    make we want
    to
    love
    and
    fuck
    and
    love
    some more!


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